The Flower Nosed Sleeper – A Pinocchio Creative Response

August 5, 2013

The Flower Nosed Sleeper
By Ashley Hoernig
Grade 5

Once upon a time there was a doll named Pinocchio and he lied A LOT!

Whenever he lied his nose would turn into a flower. But… when his nose turns into a flower he sees a shooting star so he can make a wish. The wish he always made was to be able to sleep because he could not sleep on his own. So whenever he got to sleep it made him very happy. When Pinocchio would sleep his flower nose would die and turn back to normal. So when his nose was fully back to normal he would awaken from his sleep. That would make him very mad and whenever he got mad he would talk it out with his magical pet goldfish that could talk and that would make him feel much better. When he felt better he would lie again and his nose would turn into a flower and he would see a shooting star so he can make the wish to sleep and when his flower nose died he would get mad and talk to his pet fish again. This would just keep going on and on because he lied. One day he could not lie. He could not lie because he ran out of lies! So when he ran out of lies he just started walking in the little village and he came across a hobbledehoy

which is an awkward young fellow. They both started talking to each other but instead of Pinocchio lying he was talking truthfully. When they were done with their conversation that was of course about a rainbow because Pinocchio loves rainbows, a rainbow suddenly appeared right in front of him and he could touch it and sit on it. So he climbed the rainbow and on the other side instead of there being a pot of gold there was a camel. He was scared of camels so he ran back. When he got back he was really tired so he went to talk it out with his goldfish. His pet understood very much how tired he was. So the fish finally revealed that he was a wizard in disguise to look like a fish waiting for the day to come for Pinocchio to talk truthfully and that day was today! When he finished saying how he could grant wishes Pinocchio said well since you’re a wizard can you make me be able to sleep without having to lie? The wizard said no because he said Pinocchio had to find all the people he lied to and apologize to them. Pinocchio said ok. Pinocchio went into the village to apologize to all the people he lied to, after he apologized to all the people he lied to he went back to the wizard and asked if he could grant his wish so he could sleep on his own. But the wizard said NO! The wizard said no because Pinocchio has to do one more task to get his wish granted and the task is that he has to do two good deeds so again Pinocchio said ok. So he rushed off to the village to do his two good deeds. When Pinocchio was walking around in the village he found a sign on a restaurant that said “HELP NEEDED”. So Pinocchio thought I should go see what they need help doing and help them and that will be my first good deed. So he went inside and asked the manager what they needed help doing. The manager said what I really need help doing is cleaning this place up. Pinocchio could see that by the looks of the place. Pinocchio said I could help what do you want me to do? The manager said could you clear the tabletops? Pinocchio said sure. When he finished he asked the manager if he needed any more help he said no and thanked Pinocchio for helping out. When Pinocchio walked out he officially had one good deed done and one to go. As Pinocchio was walking around he came across a man finishing some food. When suddenly the man fell to the ground. Pinocchio quickly found a phone and called 911. The ambulance soon came and thanked Pinocchio for saving this man’s life and they rushed the man off to the hospital. And that was his second good deed done. When he got back to the wizard Pinocchio asked him if his wish could be granted. And the wizard said yes. Pinocchio was relieved because he was so tired but the wizard said on one condition and that was if Pinocchio never lied again. Pinocchio said yes and that was a promise. So Pinocchio got his wish to be able to sleep on his own and he fell fast asleep. And that’s the story of how Pinocchio finally got to sleep without having to lie.

The End.    

This is a finalist in our Pinocchio Creative Response Contest in collaboration with Philadelphia Stories, Jr. From August 5-16, leave a comment on this post or like the link  on our Facebook page to vote for this entry to win a prize!

23 Responses

  1. Stacey says:

    So creative Ashley! We are so proud of you. Love, Mom

  2. Sherri Serbin says:

    This is absolutely fantastic! I cast my vote here!

  3. Sherri Serbin says:

    This is fantastic! It gets my vote

  4. Melissa Montovino says:

    Great story Ashley! We are very proud of you for your work.

    Aunt Melissa and boys

  5. Sara Simasek says:

    Very creative story Ashley!

  6. Marsha Avery says:

    Absolutely outstanding! An imagination beyond! Wonderful!

    Marsha Avery

  7. Patti Montovino says:

    I enjoyed ” The Flower Nosed Sleeper”, by Ashley Hoernig.
    The story presented to you that you can achieve many things. Good deeds of any kind reap rewards of good sleep and helped Pinocchio realize that truth is better then lies.
    Good morals in a story for young people to read.
    Good job!

  8. Joe Montovino says:

    Ashley used some great creativity in telling a story about how to do the right thing. Hopefully many people will get a chance to read her story and learn from it. Good job,

  9. Jeanne Harkin says:

    This is an inspiring and interesting story———-good work.

  10. Marie says:

    Way to write Ashley!! I am so proud of you!!
    I vote for Ashley!!

  11. Sandra Cobb says:

    Ashley, while your story is quite fantastical it hits a very real problem: the inability to get a good night’s sleep on a bad conscience. Pinocchio must not only recognize his bad deed but he must also make amends before he is rewarded.
    Good Luck to you,

  12. Brigitte says:

    Wonderful story told with great imagination. I loved the positive message of the ending. Well done!

  13. Holly Davies says:

    Love this story!! Great job Ashley!!

  14. Kristina says:

    This story is so imaginative!

  15. Joe McClung says:

    My favorite part is when we learned Pinocchio’s pet fish was a wizard in disguise. Special people are everywhere…some in binding and some in plane sight. Great story !

  16. Susan Fausnaught says:

    A very sweet story about the importance of telling the truth and the consequences of lying.

  17. Eric Weingrad says:

    Wonderful read! This story comes from a brilliant kid…the best of them all!! Congratulations, Ashley!

  18. Ellen Salcedo says:

    I love this story! Good job, Ashley!

  19. Michela Winter says:

    I loved the story. She has quite an imagination. Keep up the good work honey.

  20. Craig Faassen says:

    Bravo, Ashley!

  21. Marybeth Kufen says:

    Great job, Ashley! I vote for Ashley!

  22. Allison says:

    Love it, Ashley!! Very creative!

  23. Allison says:

    Love it, Ashley! Great job!

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